BLURB: Chad Holt
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hey man,
it’s a lot easier for me to type in here than over my phone currently.
i liked what i saw so far, am defnitely interested in the rest of it.
it ends at supreme court, right?
what you sent me, i mean obviously a first-person deal, unless you were going to have someone else write about the case.
there's a lot of tedious shit that happens over a court case.
they can be boring to write/read/hear about,
trust me, i work with a dude who won't shut up about the shit, not realizing that anybody who isn’t a lawyer won’t give a fuck.
i’d be sure and stick with the personal story of experiencing it in your life over the banal realities of the case moving through the system,
so, yeah ... i mean the approach you got there seems the right way to tell it.
I wonder what the extent/speciics of the spying were,
what exactly is behind “how did they know i was a fucking faggot,” and exactly what the dps did to break the law...
Those would all affect the appropriateness of any tone.
tone seems ne to me ... from what i've read so far and know about what happened so far, though.
Don't come off as someone just bitching about how the world is a mean place, especially for (insert here)
though, because that's pretty much all anyone writes about these days, as far as shit i see online.
I'm not much of a reader, so most of the shit i see is on internet, and everything seems to be a piece of this huge
national bitchfest.
i'm not even saying the bitching isn't warranted,
it's just if one doesn't set themself apart from it in their writing,
then the best they can ever even hope for is just to be the best of the bitches.
I think you're set up well here because you were working in law enforcement,
you were in a sense playing a role/doing your part simply as a... citizen i guess i'd say, facelessly holding your spot in
the bureaucracy and seemingly purposefully avoiding any type of expressions of self that would set you apart as an
individual and then i'm assuming they ended up kind of rooting out shit that actually put you in the position of,
actually created that environment that you see today online and on the news and shit, and brought it into what
should have just been a soulless,machine like scenario, in the paperwork section of a vast law enforcement agency.
The tone,
i mean are you pissed off?
do you think it's funny? or typical?
whatever...
I think you've got freedom for whatever tone you think is appropriate depending on what all happened.
But so far, yeah.
You got the nasty, funny sex stuff at the beginning there
and it works,
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that's pretty much my area of expertise.
and then yeah, when you get to the nuts and bolts later on,
the fact that it happened while you were working for the cops and you talking a bit about the job and the reports and
the chains of command and shit, it allows for the sort of matter-of-fact, straight-up information part of the story that
you've got to get through,
it's a good setting for that shift in tone
i guess i'm saying and then, yeah.
At this point i'm wanting to "hear" the rest of the story
so good job so far, man.
It's "good."
Isn't that all that matters?
All I ever want to know is that my shit is good.
I gotta go to work though.
if you wanted something actually helpful, then how about this: "my coworkers realized that they had to spy on me."
You left out a that or a they in there...
i don't remember which.
Hope you're good man.
Let me know when it's nished,
i want to read the rest.
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Larry McMurtry (http://www.danielkusner.com/blog/mcmurtry-promises-that-brokeback-will-savetexas)
(screenwriter of "Brokeback Mountain") once told me that Texas was so huge, its vast size molded folks into
exercising an unrestrained freedom that stretched further than the eye could see.
Crime is always about someone being uncool and citizens experiencing horrible luck.
No one ever calls a police station because they're in a good mood.
While that sucked, the best part of working at DPD were my coworkers ... What a stressful sh-out-of-water
experience that was....
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Don't come off as someone just bitching about how the world is a mean place, especially for (insert here)
though, because that's pretty much all anyone writes about these days, as far as shit i see online.
I'm not much of a reader, so most of the shit i see is on internet, and everything seems to be a piece of this huge
national bitchfest.
i'm not even saying the bitching isn't warranted,
it's just if one doesn't set themself apart from it in their writing,
then the best they can ever even hope for is just to be the best of the bitches.
I think you're set up well here because you were working in law enforcement,
you were in a sense playing a role/doing your part simply as a... citizen i guess i'd say, facelessly holding your spot in
the bureaucracy and seemingly purposefully avoiding any type of expressions of self that would set you apart as an
individual and then i'm assuming they ended up kind of rooting out shit that actually put you in the position of,
actually created that environment that you see today online and on the news and shit, and brought it into what
should have just been a soulless,machine like scenario, in the paperwork section of a vast law enforcement agency.
The tone,
i mean are you pissed off?
do you think it's funny? or typical?
whatever...
I think you've got freedom for whatever tone you think is appropriate depending on what all happened.
But so far, yeah.
You got the nasty, funny sex stuff at the beginning there
and it works,
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that's pretty much my area of expertise.
and then yeah, when you get to the nuts and bolts later on,
the fact that it happened while you were working for the cops and you talking a bit about the job and the reports and
the chains of command and shit, it allows for the sort of matter-of-fact, straight-up information part of the story that
you've got to get through,
it's a good setting for that shift in tone
i guess i'm saying and then, yeah.
At this point i'm wanting to "hear" the rest of the story
so good job so far, man.
It's "good."
Isn't that all that matters?
All I ever want to know is that my shit is good.
I gotta go to work though.
if you wanted something actually helpful, then how about this: "my coworkers realized that they had to spy on me."
You left out a that or a they in there...
i don't remember which.
Hope you're good man.
Let me know when it's nished,
i want to read the rest.
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Larry McMurtry (http://www.danielkusner.com/blog/mcmurtry-promises-that-brokeback-will-savetexas)
(screenwriter of "Brokeback Mountain") once told me that Texas was so huge, its vast size molded folks into
exercising an unrestrained freedom that stretched further than the eye could see.
Crime is always about someone being uncool and citizens experiencing horrible luck.
No one ever calls a police station because they're in a good mood.
While that sucked, the best part of working at DPD were my coworkers ... What a stressful sh-out-of-water
experience that was....
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CHAD HOLT, editor-publisher of Whoopsy! magazine and subject of the documentary “Total Badass.” (Photo: Truitt Ray, 2015.)
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